November 09, 2007

Friday Flash Fiction 18

THE POINT FURTHEST FROM THE SUN
By Gareth L Powell

Condensation clings to the window. Outside, a quiet rain falls. The only sound you can hear comes from the flat above: the
endless scratching of a record player repeating the same phrase over and over and over. You lie quietly on the bed, listening, wrapped in the musty blankets, too comfortable to move. Kirstie sits on the arm of the chair by the window.

'I just can't see the point any more,' she says. She starts to cry. Lying there, you watch her walk out into the hall in her thick socks, to the top of the stairs, and you wonder if you should go after her. But the blankets are warm and you're very tired. You've taken a drug that's made you very tired.

6 comments:

neil said...

I like the end, didn't see it coming. Very effective.

GLP said...

Paul Raven calls this a "bleak little nugget" on Futurismic:

http://futurismic.com/2007/11/09/friday-free-fiction-for-9th-november/

dan said...

well, he wasn't wrong, was he?

I like the ambiguity of the "you" character's situation. Are you being euthanised? Are you a junkie? Something else altogether?

Rob said...

Nice work.

I wonder what that phrase on the player was?

Rob

GLP said...

I'm open to suggestions, Rob...

Rob said...

Perhaps it would be something different for each reader?

Which is ... slightly creepy!